Essay 2: Final Draft

The final draft of Essay 2 is due 11:59pm, Friday, 5.15. Upload it to Canvas as Essay 2. Guidelines for this final draft:

• Your essay should run 1,500-2,000 words. It should include a Works Cited page. An acknowledgements section is optional.
• The title of your essay should identify both your topic and stance as a writer.
• Your prose should be carefully edited and proofread.
• Your document should be thoughtfully designed (optionally including images) and follow MLA guidelines.

I’ve put together a checklist for editing and proofreading. This is the checklist you’ll be using for Wednesday’s and Friday’s homework.

Also, I’ll use the same rubric for grading this essay as I did for Essay 1. I appended this rubric to the checklist.

Good luck! I’m excited to see how you demonstrate in this essay what you’ve learned in this course!

Class Fri 5.15

Metaphor Show and Tell: Metaphors You’ll Live By

Groupwork: Proofreading

1. Proofread the first two pages of your partner’s essay. Don’t edit your partner’s paper: just mark with the highlighter tool (or something) and make notes.
2. Explain to your partner what you spotted and how to fix it.
3. Writers, note what your partner found. Later today, go through the rest of the essay yourself: you’ll likely find the same issues throughout the essay.

To Do

• Make final edits to Essay 2 and upload it tonight by midnight.

Have a great summer!

Editing Partners

28
Devin – Shelby
Jay – Taylor
Laura – TJ
Kaitlyn – Ryan
Kelsey – Jess
Chris – Matt
Billy – Troy
Alexis – Olivia
Carly – Jessica
Louis – Makenzie
James – Ev

48
Jake – Ryan
Frank – Brian
Meagan – Louis
Adrienne – Jess
Kerry – Spencer
Goppal – Kody
Sam – Kate
Susan – Justin
Emily – Daniel
William – Caleigh
Tyler – Jack

35
Caitlin – Tamara
Sophia – Alyson
John – AJ
Brian – Michael
Aisling – Hallie
Brett – Julia
Nicole – Mary
Ty – Roger
Sally – Kimberly
Olivia – Shervin
Erin – Kim P

Class Wed 5.13

Evaluations

Group work: MLA format and citations

• Trade essays with your partner and check his or her work using the checklist.
• Make a note of anything you partner did differently from you.
• Discuss these discrepancies with your partner and look up anything you’re not sure is right.

Some final tips:

• Pronouns
• Active v Passive voice

To Do

For class on Friday, carefully proofread your essay and edit on the sentence and phrase level for style. Use the checklist as a guide. Bring your essay to class on Friday on your laptop. These are the final touches–good work!

Class Mon 5.11

Writing What You Think

I want to share a few thoughts from Verlyn Klinkenborg’s Several Short Sentences About Writing that might help you as you revise your implications/reflections.

Metadiscourse

Metadiscourse is language the writer uses to acknowledge and guide the reader. It’s the writer’s commentary about her subject. It includes conjunctive adverbs, signpost words (“firstly,” “secondly,” “also,” “finally”), rhetorical questions, and other phrases that structure the text for the reader. You already know what metadiscourse is and use it when you write. But now I want you to be aware of your metadiscourse and use it for deliberate effect.

Punctuation 201

You know how to use periods, commas and occasional semi-colons. Confident writers, though, know how to take advantage of two special punctuation marks for emphasis and special effect: the colon and the long dash (or “em-dash”).

To Do

Before class Wed.

• Now’s the optimal time to finish off any global revisions. Do it now, before you weeks gets crazy.
• Think about where to add or replace metadiscourse in your essay to guide your reader.
• Find a few places to use colons and dashes for clarity and emphasis.
• Get your essay as perfect as you can in its design and formatting. Check your work against the formatting section of this checklist.

Class Wed. 5.13

• Bring this perfectly formatted document to class on Wednesday–preferably on your laptop.
• Bring your laptop to complete your course evaluation during class.

Conference

Attendance at your group’s conference is mandatory. Double check your calendar now.

The conference will be held in my office, Memorial 022.

Before the conference:

• Print and read each of your group members’ second drafts. (They should have emailed their second draft to you on Friday.)
• Draw straight lines under sentences you really like.
• Draw squiggly lines under sentences you think need work or you have questions about.
• Make some notes at the end of the questions you have or things you want to comment on or suggest.

What to bring:

• a copy of your second draft on your laptop or in print
• the printed copy of each of your group members’ drafts with your notes

	5.4 Mon	5.5 Tu	5.6 Wed	5.7 Th	5.8 Fri
10am	28-A Chris, Ev, Jess	35-F Brett, Tamara		—
11am	48-F Tyler, Caleigh, William	35-F Julia, Roger	48-B Emily, Brian, Daniel	35-D Nicole, Sally, Brian	48-A Adrienne, Ryan, Susan
12pm	28-F Ryan, Jess P, Matt	48-C Spencer, Sam, Frank, Jack	28-G James, Devin, Carly	48-E Kody, Kerry, Louis	28-D Shelby, Taylor, Louis, Jay
	—	—	—	—	—
2pm	28-C Billy, Laura, Troy	28-E TJ, Olivia, Kelsey	48-D Justin, Kate, Meagan	35-G Caitlin, Kim P, AJ	48-G Jess, Gopal, Jake
3pm			35-C Erin, Mary, Aisling
4pm	28-B Kaitlyn, Alexis, Makenzie	35-A Shervin, Hallie, Olivia	35-E Ty, Michael, Kimberly	35-B Sophia, John, Alyson

Class Mon 4.27

Today’s Agenda

1. Continue Workshops, following the model we used Friday.
2. Practise local revision skill: “omit needless words.”
3. Start writing your revising plan (p9).

To Do

• Tues 4.28, midnight: p9 due
• Wed 2.29, class: Bring a copy of your most recent draft to class. It can be the first draft or one you’ve already started changing for draft 2.

p10: e2 draft 2

To get credit for p10, you’ll need to do the following two things:

1. Revise and submit a second draft of Essay 2 by noon Friday, 5.1.
   • This draft should be between 1,500-2,000 words and have all elements of the assignment, including a thesis statement, citations, Works Cited page, title, and MLA document design. Refer to the full essay 2 assignment instructions for details on what I’m looking for.
   • Email a copy of your second draft to your group and copy me. They’ll need to read it before your group’s conference.
   • Upload your draft to Canvas as p10.
2. Participate in your group’s conference (5.4-5.9): see schedule and instructions.

p9: Revising Plan

This process assignment is very similar to p4. This time, I want to your plan to consist of two paragraphs that span a full page and probably part of a second page. The two paragraphs should:

1. Summary: Go through your group members’ feedback and write a paragraph summary of their responses to your draft. Where did they feel confused or unconvinced? What advice did they give you about moving to a second draft?
2. Plan: Your plan for revising–
   • I already know you’ll automatically be doing the following things, so don’t waste your time and mine saying so:
     • revising out the terms “symbolism,” “symbolic,” etc.
     • adding any section that were missing
     • condensing your summary/plot paragraph
     • revise your intro and make it better
   • Instead, please tell me about the following:
     • the metaphors you’ll be changing, adding, or subtracting, and what specifically the revised metaphors will be
     • your revised thesis, as best you can form it at this point, and how it unifies the metaphors you’re writing about
     • the new sources you’re responding to or what you want to accomplish in your source sections
     • what you’re final section reflections will be about, or what new things you want to say in that section

Optionally, at the end, you may ask me specific questions on things you need help on.

You will know that you are on track with this essay if you are able to put together a detailed and  focused revising plan, and to ask me specific questions about how to move forward.

This assignment is due in Canvas tomorrow, Tue 4.28, by midnight.

Workshop Fri 4.24

Take today’s class and part of Monday’s class to workshop your drafts with your group.

Before Reading

• Writer:
  • Circulate copies of your draft to the group.
  • Tell your readers the kind of feedback you would most like to get on your writing, or any questions or concerns you may have about your piece.
• Readers:
  • Take notes on any issues or questions raised by the writer.

During Reading

• Writer, read your draft aloud.
• Readers, read along with the writer with a pen in your hand–
  • Mark effective passages with a straight line.
  • Mark passages you want to ask questions about with a squiggly line.
  • Circle metaphors the writer identifies–or tries to.

After Reading

• Readers:
  • Once the writer finishes reading, take a minute or two to jot down advice or questions on the draft or you Response Letter.
  • Discuss what you wrote during the reading and in your letter.
  • In particular, compare with the other readers what you circled as metaphors. Help the writer rethink or clarify any metaphors that the group thought weren’t sharp, or where there are disagreements about what they are.
• Writer:
  • Listen quietly and take notes on the responses of your readers.
  • Ask questions after all the readers have responded to your work.
  • Collect the annotated copies of your text and Response Letters from your readers.